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Share a v1 draft of your work product 👇
Post a link or embed a file of your v1 work product below. You will share this early draft with your housemates at checkpoint to get their feedback.
[paste link or embed file]https://docs.google.com/document/d/1wDuJad9GV3Dg56hfTTFkvK89Tn98k7iA6zfApI_KJJ4/edit
Write down your feedback 👇
Write down bullet points of 2 pieces of feedback you received on your v1 project from your housemates or someone else you shared your draft with (this could be an expert, mentor, family member, etc).
- feedback 1
- feedback 2
What is your plan to make these changes?
How will you iterate your v1 draft before sharing your final project with your audience?
- change 1 correct spelling
- change 2 correct gramar
- skill 1 genetics
- skill 2 habbit formation
- skill 3 siting soarces
- skill 4 reasearch
This checkpoint is being reviewed by Jasmine
- Izzy, this is a good first draft. For your next project, be sure to have someone else (whether it be a parent, mentor, friend) review it and get feedback before submitting it.
- I noticed how you listed your sources at the end. This is a good start, for the next draft it would strengthen your argument to cite in your essay which articles you got your facts from.
- Run the "Spelling and Grammar Check" tool on your draft
- Introduction: It sounds like what originally interested you in this topic was your own pet cats. Be sure to introduce the reader to what your overall topic is about in the intro.
- How to Write a Good Conclusion
📚 Content Feedback:
- The research you did on polygenes as it relates to cats is super interesting!
- As someone who doesn’t know a lot about cats, I was confused at first by what you said about how the color patterns only occur on the X chromosome. I was curious why you mentioned that since I assume that normally every cat has at least one X chromosome. You made me curious, so I did some research to find out that calicos are distinctive for their tri-coloredness, and then I understood why calicos are mostly female since they have 2 X chromosomes to display multiple colors. I think you could make this more clear in connecting the dots for the reader.
- I was also wondering what led you to this conclusion: “it's actually more likely that fur color is determined by attitude, not vise versa.” I think this can be an opportunity for you to provide a further explanation or cite sources on this claim.
- I think the question you posed about autism in cats is an interesting one
- Overall I think you did a good job in synthesizing your research into your own words
☑️ Action Items:
- Check out the informative writing and concise writing async level ups in Canvas.
- Provide further explanation and sources on your claim “it’s actually more likely that fur color is determined by attitude, not vise versa”
- Justification for why you should be leveled up in Habit Formation
- Set up a 1:1 with Jasmine to talk through feedback